tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post1699361667326905570..comments2023-08-17T07:59:38.737-07:00Comments on West Coast Writers: Silent Scream #Friday FictioneersLoreleihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07912727189990782170noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-41025981342571740092012-08-10T12:25:24.193-07:002012-08-10T12:25:24.193-07:00nicely done - thanks for writing!nicely done - thanks for writing!manofthewordnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-72709960790566899102012-08-03T21:49:14.719-07:002012-08-03T21:49:14.719-07:00I appreciate a really original story, and this was...I appreciate a really original story, and this was definitely original.Danny Bowmanhttp://glossarch.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-72109199245245338002012-08-03T19:14:42.542-07:002012-08-03T19:14:42.542-07:00I enjoyed your different story.I enjoyed your different story.janethttp://sustainabilitea.wordpress.com/2012/08/02/friday-fictioneers-another-grapevine/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-19289602320467180512012-08-03T18:30:48.120-07:002012-08-03T18:30:48.120-07:00enjoyed, this, it resonated with me.enjoyed, this, it resonated with me.billgncshttp://bwfiction.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-34007158060879065572012-08-03T14:46:29.335-07:002012-08-03T14:46:29.335-07:00Ooh, an answer to the old question of whether plan...Ooh, an answer to the old question of whether plants can feel pain. You wrap us up in your story and take us right along with you.<br />I stumbled a bit on the first line - maybe either "animals" or "the bird" would flow better. but it didn't spoil what felt like a great opening paragraph to something longer.<br />I'm over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/03/friday-fiction-torment/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-34398565013574616332012-08-03T06:23:20.901-07:002012-08-03T06:23:20.901-07:00Or tell them to be quiet. But I suspect the narrat...Or tell them to be quiet. But I suspect the narrator is too kind to say that to the vines. Interesting take.C.C. https://www.blogger.com/profile/06070310862785263964noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-13867490342093843542012-08-03T04:27:12.387-07:002012-08-03T04:27:12.387-07:00Oh, poor vines. That'd be a hard thing to bear...Oh, poor vines. That'd be a hard thing to bear, hearing the natural world's cries. It would break my heart.<br />Really well done.<br /><br />http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/slickAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-6296584054097564102012-08-03T02:56:00.528-07:002012-08-03T02:56:00.528-07:00If plants could talk, I wonder what they'd say...If plants could talk, I wonder what they'd say to us.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18149363845050477601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-70365392321608666182012-08-03T00:15:06.240-07:002012-08-03T00:15:06.240-07:00That's a really original take on the prompt, a...That's a really original take on the prompt, and quite moving too. Well done.Sandra Crookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00534491053812317718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-42862589656286064872012-08-02T23:21:52.569-07:002012-08-02T23:21:52.569-07:00Very interesting! Listening for for something beau...Very interesting! Listening for for something beautiful, but hearing instead the screams of severed vines. Nature always has something surprising to tell us.Jan Brownhttp://mezzojan.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-69734848466458086822012-08-02T19:21:29.650-07:002012-08-02T19:21:29.650-07:00That was a different twist on a direct approach. I...That was a different twist on a direct approach. I liked that. The only thing I noticed to crit was in this sentence: "But this is stranger, more painful...". I'd use "more strange" since you used "more painful". To me it just flows better if you make both phrases more similar :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3997937108031302673.post-54906938600973815032012-08-02T19:13:47.976-07:002012-08-02T19:13:47.976-07:00Interesting take on the photo. I never thought of...Interesting take on the photo. I never thought of doing a, basically, realistic story on it. I guess horror and sci-fi form too much of my make-up. On the other hand, you had a bit of both tied in there with the raw truthful feeling.<br />ScottScotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12956629131894555121noreply@blogger.com