Thursday, September 27, 2012

Friday Fictioneers: Trolls

Hi readers and writers,
It's Friday Fictioneers again.  If you'd like to "play" along then go to www.madison-woods.com, where on the blog you'll find all the details about Friday Fictioneers.  The photo prompt this week is pasted below (Photo by Sandra Crook).  We write a 100 word response between Weds and Friday and link them all to Madison Woods' blog.  I am always amazed at how diverse the responses are, given the same photo!

Trolls

As soon as I went through the open gate, I felt it.  A menace hung in the air, especially over those rocks.  I passed the red crystal over the one to the left.  The crystal intoned, "Troll."  How had they been turned into stones?  Was it safe to go this way?  Would they reanimate at night and track me down?  Vancu needed the crystal and I had to try to get it to him.  I wrapped my drab cloak tightly around me and walked down the steps between the troll rocks.  As I passed between them I heard a bass "thrum" and creaking noises.  I started to run.

14 comments:

janet said...

Nice start rife with mood. I wish I could read the rest of the story.

Boomie Bol said...

Oh wow! This is very original, and so different from the many posts I have read. Many of us had a common theme. This is so nice.

Thanks so much for stopping by mine

Anonymous said...

Where is Vancu when you need him? I just hope she can outrun the trolls. Nice sense of danger here. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story. Ron

Carrie said...

very tense scene. I wondered if those trolls would just reanimate and *chomp*

Sandra Crook said...

Original take on the prompt, nicely done.

the contradictory optimist said...

Oooh! scary! I hope he got past them!

Reading Pleasure said...

A fine original take on the prompt

K.D. McCrite said...

Spooky. Gave me chills.

Brian said...

Very cool - I'm reminded a bit of a scene from the Hobbit, although the crystal and why vancu needs it adds a nice layer of intrigue on top of it. It's so easy to imagine those things coming to life!

rich said...

ways to save some words:

instead of: "I wrapped my drab cloak tightly around me and walked down the steps between the troll rocks." (17 words)

try: "wrapped tightly in my drab cloak, i descended the steps between troll-rocks." (12 words)

well done.

Lorelei said...

Thanks, Rich, often I do need to find ways to cut down on wordy parts. Good idea!
cheers,
Lorelei/Laura

Shirley said...

I liked this. Very different take on this pic than the others I've read. Thanks for sharing.
http://shirleymccann.blogspot.com/2012/09/friday-fictioneers-captured.html

Shirley said...

Loved the mood this one created. Ominous.

Douglas MacIlroy said...

Dear Lorelei,

It's daytime, right? She can slow down now. Nice story.

Aloha,

Doug